I entered a contest on the YA Fusion blog and won a query critique from Manuscript Critique Services. My awesome critique was from Paula Stokes. Here are some of the things I learned.
novel summary should follow the emotional sweep of the novel. It’s easy for me
to succinctly summarize the plot points, but especially with action novels, the
character arc is key.
for 250-300 words for the plot summary. While many query-writing experts
expound on the benefits of an elevator pitch and caution against more than 50
words or three sentences, nearly every positive example of a compelling query falls
within this longer limit.
enough of the plot so the story makes sense. A seemingly unrelated string of
events is not interesting. The reader needs to know why the character is doing
things. See the first point.
forget the hook. What is interesting about the novel? Why should an editor or
agent scroll down to look at those first five pages?
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