Everything: This word suffers from a lack of specificity, but my story is written for teens in (hopefully) the voice of a teen. High school students tend to think they are the center of their universe. When my character says, “Everything changed,” she means it.
Energy: This is a concrete noun when it equals mass times the square of the speed of light, but is an abstract noun when referring to a person’s work ethic or personality. To me, the sentence, “Only Matt was immune to her energy,” communicates important ideas about two characters.
Unease, Mystery & Magic: These abstract nouns are essential for the hook. I used them to stimulate curiosity in the reader.
My conclusions are:
- Voice trumps all.
- Be specific.
- Use powerful words.
- Don’t neglect the hook.